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Not throwing away my shot [Pack claim!]



Artisan

The Pirate Band
Follower

Advanced Intellectual (80)

Advanced Navigator (65)

age
3 Years
gender
Male
gems
98
size
Extra large
build
Light
posts
52
player
RelevantKoala

1K
10-14-2021, 11:40 PM

For a really small guy, that raccoon could run. Well, compared to his normal wolf speed perhaps not but he was sure a lot faster then Artisan would have assumed he'd be. Raccoons were a tree-climbing bunch, weren't they? Snails on the ground, but swinging through the trees? Maybe that was monkeys, but Art definitely presumed he'd have the upper hand here in the snow regardless.

Armando booked it as soon as he'd heard Artisan's battle cry and the brightly colored man followed hot on his bushy tail. Unfortunately whatever ground he'd caught up on in the straight line chase was immediately lost as Armando ducked beneath and went overtop spectators, eventually coming to rest behind one of the sexier ones [Recluse]. Not that the bunch of wolves who'd come to watch weren't all inherently sexy in their own ways, but Art was sure he'd seen an elderly dude show up and that brought the attraction-level average down enough for the rest to shine through.

Artisan weaved and bobbed through spectators, murmuring a soft 'excuse me, pardon me' as he navigated along until he was forced to stop at the albino woman. The raccoon's stupid helmet was clearly visible from behind her and Artisan glared daggers at it. Hya came up behind him - thank god for brothers - and Artisan waved his paw around Recluses front end while he moved to her rear. "You go that way (the side with the teeth), I go this way." He coached Hya. To the albino woman who was unwillingly placed in the middle, [Recluse] he gave his best apologetic smile. "Excuse me, love, pirate business."

"Speech"

Artisan wears multiple twine bracelets around his forelegs, each one with different colored homemade beads upon it. Each bead corresponds to a wolf who he has met and decided deserved a place on his wrist, and thus he might ask your character for a lock of fur, etc to add to his creation to remember your character by.




Chimera

Fenmyre
King

Master Hunter (245)

Master Fighter (275)

Bloodletter

age
2 Years
gender
Male
gems
622
size
Dire wolf
build
Medium
posts
410
player
Resin

Halloween 2020 - Haunted House
10-16-2021, 01:42 PM

Hearing that Manea was going to follow through on her word, Chimera had made the trek north. While the other wolves cheered and called, being obnoxious and putting on a show, the two-toned King stayed silent. He watched the fight with interest, but made no move to join the crowd or mingle with the rabble. The earthen fae and her followers yapped like mouthy little chihuahuas and, though he didn't know the brown fae, he greatly wanted her to lose. The whole fight was nothing but a spectacle. A show. Disgraceful.

Supportive calls from the woman's children rang out and Chimera was intrigued and pleased that the horned fae would invite her children to watch what could be a potentially brutal battle. This turned out to be the case. The giant amaranthine fae did exactly what needed to be done and, in Chimera's eye, she bested the other woman. Blood was spilled on both sides, but the skill and the drive was evident, tipping the scales to Manea's side. It was all well and good. Friends in the north would be beneficial to both Fenmyre and whatever Manea built alike. She had followed through with her word just like Chimera had expected, but he had needed to see it to be fully certain.

Despite the battle being completed, wolves continued to arrive in droves. Too busy for Chimera's liking. The king made sure to lock eyes with Manea for but a moment, giving a nod of approval before turning and moving away from the gathering. He had seen what needed to be seen and there was nothing left to do in the north but freeze. Chimera started the long journey home, but he doubted it would be the last time that he found himself in the snowy reaches of Boreas. Not if his plans bloomed to fruition. Plans that began with seeing Manea's two children cheering for their future empire.

"X"

Chimera is a very adult character and takes part in very adult situations. Don't read his threads. Ever.
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Chi has two black Tibetan Mastiff's as guards. Assume they're very close by.



Head Judges

Loner

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age
-
gender
-
gems
630
size
-
build
-
posts
122
player
10-16-2021, 09:46 PM
MANEA vs SPARROW for PACK CLAIM



ROUND ONE


Manea:

WRITING

5/10 for Power Play:

  • Attempts
  • -1 “There was a gap of empty space between them of about half a dozen feet or so.” There was no mention of this specific distance in pre-fight posts so it should have been attempted or OOC agreed upon with your opponent.
    -1 “...quick hop that put about a foot or two of distance between them...” You can't assume Sparrow hasn't moved.
    -1 “She jumped in toward Sparrow’s right side...” Same as above
  • General
    -2 The use of accessories in T1 fights is not allowed so you lose a point for each one (scaled armor, bladed bracers) mentioned.
8/10 for Clarity:
  • Attacks
  • -1 “...attempted to ram her head into Sparrow’s ribs...” The rib cage is big enough that this attack needs a few more specifics.
  • Positioning
  • -1 “...as she went to go past Sparrow’s shoulder...” By how much? What's the hoped for positioning here? Shoulder to shoulder? Neck to shoulder?
2/10 for Attacks:
  • +2 for headbutt with spikes
5/5 for Defenses:
  • +1 for flattened ears
  • +1 for defensive stance
  • +1 for head lowered
  • +1 for tail tucked
  • +1 for scruff bunched
10/10 for Injuries:
  • None; first round!

Status

10/12 for Experience:
  • +4 Advanced Fighter
  • +6 Master Hunter
4/5 for Health:
  • -1 for being a loner

Manea’s round one total: 44/62


Sparrow:

WRITING

8/10 for Power Play:

  • Attempts
  • -1 “From Manea's left...” You're assuming positioning.
  • General
  • -1 companions only get one attack per fight and every 'touch' they make counts as an attack. 'Grab' and 'bite' makes two.
9/10 for Clarity:
  • Positioning
  • -1 “Sparrow moved to mirror her.” I would have liked to see a bit more detail here. How is she mirroring her? In steps? Positioning? Both?
6/10 for Attacks:
  • +2 for bite (Sparrow)
  • +2 for crushing stomp/clawing
  • +2 for bite (Friar/companion)
5/5 for Defenses:
  • +1 for flattened ears
  • +1 for narrowed eyes
  • +1 for tail up for balance
  • +1 for defensive stance
  • +1 for scruff bunched
10/10 for Injuries:
  • First round; no deductions
  • Cuts and bruising to shoulder/chest

Status

12/12 for Experience:
  • +6 Master Fighter
  • +6 Master Navigator
5/5 for Health:
  • No deductions

Sparrow’s round one total: 55/62




ROUND TWO


Manea:

WRITING

8/10 for Power Play:

  • If/Than Statements
  • -1 “...before going to place it back onto the ground again...” You're assuming her paw doesn't get intercepted somewhere between attempting to claw and attempting to set it down.
  • General
  • -1 “...aiming to peck and claw at the monkey to chase it off.” Companions only get one attack per fight and every 'touch' they make counts as an attack. 'Peck' and 'claw' makes two.
6/10 for Clarity:
  • Attacks
  • -1 Which raven attacked Sparrow's companion?
    -1 “...aiming to peck and claw at the monkey to chase it off.” What kind of damage is it hoping to do? Where exactly is it attacking on the monkey?
    -1 Where on Sparrow's chest is Manea's swipe aimed?
  • Damage
  • -1 “...the minor lacerations Sparrow's companion left on her leg.” Where on her leg? Did Manea's movements change the positioning any or was the companion 100% successful?
5/10 for Attacks:
  • +1 for companion attack (pecking and clawing)
  • +2 for bite
    +1 for maim attempt
  • +1 for clawing
5/5 for Defenses:
  • +1 for shoulders rolled
  • +1 for scruff bunched
  • +1 for defensive stance
  • +1 for ears pinned
  • +1 for eyes narrowed
6/10 for Injuries:
  • -1 for moderate lacerations to scruff
  • -1 for bruised toes
  • -1 for moderate scratches to toes (severity assigned by judge)
  • -1 minor lacerations to left hind leg

Status

10/12 for Experience:
  • +4 Advanced Fighter
  • +6 Master Hunter
4/5 for Health:
  • -1 for being a loner

Manea’s round two total: 44/62


Sparrow:

WRITING

10/10 for Power Play:

  • No deductions
9/10 for Clarity:
  • Attacks
  • -1 for the foreleg throw. I'm having trouble following what's happening here. Is Sparrow trying to pin Manea by leaning into a foreleg laid over her neck or is she pushing her weight down onto her paw? The difference determines how useful her claws are here.
    -1 following that train of thought, where are her claws supposed to be doing damage? The trapezius muscle covers a lot of area.
5/10 for Attacks:
  • +1 for upward punch
  • +2 for pin/grip with claws
  • +2 for bite
5/5 for Defenses:
  • +1 for flattened ears
  • +1 for scruff bunched
  • +1 for tail up
  • +1 for hackles raised
  • +1 for eyes narrowed
9/10 for Injuries:
  • -1 for moderate lacerations to chest

Status

12/12 for Experience:
  • +6 Master Fighter
  • +6 Master Navigator
5/5 for Health:
  • No deductions
Sparrow’s round two total: 55/62


ROUND THREE


Manea:

WRITING

7/10 for Power Play:

  • General
  • -2 for using the dagger. Accessories are not allowed in T1 fights.
    -1 for the second raven's multiple attacks. Same as the first one: companions only get one attack per fight and every 'touch' they make counts as an attack. 'Claw' and 'peck' makes two.
7/10 for Clarity:
  • Attacks
  • -1 for lack of specificity in the companion's attack. What kind of damage is it hoping to do? Where exactly on her face does it want its claws and beak to land?
  • Damage
  • -1 did Sparrow's successful 'punch' do any damage?
    -1 “She winced when Sparrow's feline claws hooked into the thicker skin of her scruff...” Did they do any damage?
3/10 for Attacks:
  • +2 for stab
  • +1 for the companion's attacks
5/5 for Defenses:
  • +1 for defensive stance
  • +1 for tensed muscles
  • +1 for ears flattened
  • +1 for eyes narrowed
  • +1 for tail up for balance
7/10 for Injuries:
  • -1 for light bruising to chin (damage assigned by judge)
  • -1 for minor scratches to back of neck from claws (damage assigned by judge)
  • -1 for moderate lacerations to scruff from bite

Status

10/12 for Experience:
  • +4 Advanced Fighter
  • +6 Master Hunter
4/5 for Health:
  • -1 for being a loner

Manea’s round three total: 43/62


Sparrow:

WRITING

9/10 for Power Play:

  • Attempts
  • -1 “...just above where her (Sparrow's) foreleg rested in order to control better the woman's movement.” You're assuming her foreleg is still there.
8/10 for Clarity:
  • Attacks
  • -1 “Her free right foreleg sought to claw and hook around Manea's left foreleg...” Claw and then hook?
  • Damage
  • -1 Did the bird do any damage at all?
5/10 for Attacks:
  • +2 for pin/grip with claws
  • +2 for bite
  • +1 for leg swipe
5/5 for Defenses:
  • +1 for tucked tail
  • +1 for defensive stance
  • +1 for pinned ears
  • +1 for narrowed eyes
  • +1 for raised hackles
7/10 for Injuries:
  • -2 for moderate stab wound to shoulder
  • -1 for minor scratches and pockmarks to both cheeks and forehead (damage assigned by judge)

Status

12/12 for Experience:
  • +6 Master Fighter
  • +6 Master Navigator
5/5 for Health:
  • No deductions

Sparrow’s round three total: 51/62


Totals:



Manea: 131/186
Sparrow: 161/186



And the winner is...


SPARROW! Manea must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Sparrow has won control of the disbanded pack Incendium.

Damage:

Both:
  • All scratches, pokes, bruises and light lacerations will heal within 3 ooc days
  • All moderate lacerations will heal in 1 ooc week
  • All moderate stab wounds will heal in 2 ooc weeks

Notes:



Tips for writing and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here):

For Shelby: In reading through your posts I could tell you tried to be fair in Manea's responses  and I really appreciate that effort! Even though this is a loss for you this was a good fight and you did well. I think you missed out on a lot of points by keeping your attacks simple so in the future I would suggest throwing in more combos. All in all, what I gathered from your posts that you're just a bit rusty. You know how this works but I think things have changed since you were a judge. Going forward remember that using accessories is not allowed in T1s, attack combos are big earners, and be specific in your character's actions and intentions but mindful of your opponent's autonomy.

For Iko: You've been in enough fights that you know what you're doing and it shows in your posts. I can see past judgements in your choice of wording and use of phrases. Clearly, you did very well! My only suggestion for you is that your clarity needs a little refining. A reoccurring theme I ran across is that while all the right details were there, they tended to crop up in the wrong order leading me to reread passages. That really is my only suggestion for you!

Both: I can't stress this enough: this was a good fight! You both have reasons to be proud here. This was an easy read and in fights where things can get very messy that is a rare thing.

- By Lazuli